Writer:                                                                                 Assessor:

 

Please put your name on the top right of your partner's speech to indicate you assessed it, and offer written feedback to the writer directly on the written speech and on this sheet. You will need to return this handout to the writer, and each of you will submit your assessed speeches and peer assessment handouts in, along with your final speech. You are not making corrections on the speech, only offering commentary and asking questions regarding the elements listed below.

 

1. MLA format: Begin by looking through the speech and paying attention only to format. If you are not sure about the conventions of formatting, consult the MLA Guidelines. Is the formatting correct (name and course information on the top left of the page, a title, typed, double-spaced, in Times New Roman, 12 pt font, with appropriate margins)? IS his speech 350 words or less? If it's longer suggest what he could cut.

 

 

2. Title: Does the writer have a title that suggests the focus of the speech (i.e. either a boring one, like This I Believe Speech, or a more specific, creative and interesting one that indicates the specific belief)? If not, help him come up with an interesting title.

 

 

3. An interesting opening: Does the writer start with an engaging and interesting hook (or attention getter)? If not, suggest how he might start.

 

 

 4. Clear statement of belief: Does he clearly state his belief? Underline it. If it's not clear, restate it, as best you can, in your own words.

 

 

 5. Telling a story: Could this belief be anyone's belief, or is the belief grounded in a story that is specific and detailed enough that it is unique to the writer? If the writer needs to ground the belief in more of a detailed story, indicate this. Ask the writer a couple of questions to help him identify more of the details of the story.

 

 

 6.  Developing insight: By the end of the speech, does the writer simply restate the belief he stated early in the speech, or has he developed an insight or two, to suggest a significant conclusion and the complexity of his belief? Does the speech create a strong impression? If you think he could create a stronger impression by the end, indicate this, and suggest how.

 

 

 7. Grammar and spelling: Are there any problems with spelling or grammar (for example, sentence fragments, run ons, unclear pronoun references, problems with verb tense)? If so, identify the problems that need to be fixed.

 

8.  Appeals to logos and ethos: Does the writer make his belief seem credible? Does the writer's explanation of his belief or how he came to believe what he believes need to be developed? If so, indicate where he needs more explanation. Ask him a question or two that you feel needs to be answered.

 

 9. Appeals to pathos: Does the writer move you emotionally in some way with his speech? Does he make you empathize with him and feel what he felt? If not, suggest how he could do this.

 

10.  Structure/organization: Is the speech divided into appropriate paragraphs, logically organized? If not, suggest changes that need to be made.

 

 

11.  Rhetorical and stylistic devices: Has the writer used some rhetorical and stylistic devices to make his expression of his belief more effective (a metaphor or analogy, repetition or parallelism (like anaphora or tricolon), a zeugma, tautology, or a variation in sentence length, to create rhythm? Identify the devices he has used and comment on how effective they are. If he hasn't developed any or enough rhetorical or stylistic devices, suggest where and how he could do so to make his speech more powerful and interesting.

 

 

 12.  Strengths and overall impression: Overall, what are the strengths of the speech?

 

 

 13. Final suggestions: Any final suggestions for revision?